tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post1731984209422892890..comments2024-03-14T07:11:37.650+00:00Comments on Porky's Expanse!: EXPANDERS! - 'ROGUE'Porkyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00604351052444947490noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-7525071403971433602011-03-27T07:17:22.690+01:002011-03-27T07:17:22.690+01:00I put up this week's challenge here.I put up this week's challenge <a href="http://nineworldstenthousandthings.blogspot.com/2011/03/expansion-joints-part-5-pass.html" rel="nofollow">here</a>.Jenniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06589550267781293462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-86706314841737236532011-03-26T13:38:58.480+00:002011-03-26T13:38:58.480+00:00@ Jennie - Nothing's really wrong, if we disco...@ Jennie - Nothing's really wrong, if we discount the limited number of hours in the day that is. Too few. If you'd like to take over the game, I'd be very glad, and I'm sure you'll do a wondrous job of it. If you go ahead, I'll post a link to direct across anyone who hasn't heard.<br /><br />@ Andy - My recommendation is to read everything there.Porkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00604351052444947490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-63974110128828536062011-03-26T12:29:08.488+00:002011-03-26T12:29:08.488+00:00@Jennie
That sounds like a plan! In the meantime I...@Jennie<br />That sounds like a plan! In the meantime I'm checking out your blog ;-)Andyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07158215811847131189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-79148674422917320412011-03-25T16:23:31.270+00:002011-03-25T16:23:31.270+00:00@Porky - Last one? Why? Is something wrong? I'...@Porky - Last one? Why? Is something wrong? I've been worried about your uncharacteristic absence.<br /><br />Hopefully, if you are cutting back here, it is because you've been hired at a fabulous, interesting, incredibly lucrative new job that is going to take up all your creative time while you do exactly what you've always wanted to do in the company of equally creative, fascinating, and entertaining coworkers.<br /><br />@Andy - if Porky isn't going to continue this, I can pick it up for a bit, at least until we reach 15. I have a few more words picked out already...Jenniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06589550267781293462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-82142326586144387792011-03-25T13:28:00.900+00:002011-03-25T13:28:00.900+00:00@ Andy - Another great instalment. I was imagining...@ Andy - Another great instalment. I was imagining the series would go on and on, but it turns out this may actually have been the last, more's the pity. There's nothing to stop you finishing it yourself though, according to the same rules, taking as long as you need. Fifteen instalments would seem right to me, for 225 words in total.<br /><br />@ ArmChairGeneral - Full of character. You can almost see the moonlight. Reminds me - unsurprisingly given the combination of words - of the Fighting Fantasy gamebook <i>Midnight Rogue</i>. A classic, and well worth a play if you can find it.Porkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00604351052444947490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-40733259924313069922011-03-24T18:54:09.875+00:002011-03-24T18:54:09.875+00:00Midnight. The clock rung. The toll sounded the met...Midnight. The clock rung. The toll sounded the meter of the rogue's last performance.Game Master Rob Adamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08198920658123610173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-8098638519836376442011-03-21T15:56:42.822+00:002011-03-21T15:56:42.822+00:00Running a day late, but here's my little contr...Running a day late, but here's my little contribution: http://creepycorridor.blogspot.com/2011/03/wordplay-expanding-with-porky.html<br /><br />How many more words may we expect? Maybe I should start thinking how to end it with a climax? I have some ideas, but it's difficult to plan without knowing how many more "chapters" will follow...Andyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07158215811847131189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-11645299972205072412011-03-21T11:28:02.880+00:002011-03-21T11:28:02.880+00:00@ Bix - I'm with Jim on this: clever entry, an...@ Bix - I'm with Jim on this: clever entry, and G.I. is just fine. Good memory! It also shows 'rogue' is a solid addition to those <a href="http://theporkster.blogspot.com/2011/02/space-words-of-doom.html" rel="nofollow">Space Words of Doom</a>.<br /><br />@ peter - A compliment well-deserved!<br /><br />@ Jim Hale - Now that's enthusiasm! The two new lead in smoothly and give us much more context. For me you've done especially well to avoid the 15-word sections seeming too regular, a danger as the instalments build up. Instead, the text has a very natural feel, as if we're getting just the information we need in each sentence. You'd get bonus points - if there were any - for 'aweigh'..!<br /><br />I've left a comment at Jennie's, and as ever the story is well worth reading and re-reading.Porkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00604351052444947490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-87278067111154425822011-03-21T06:52:38.876+00:002011-03-21T06:52:38.876+00:00Better late than never, this week's is here.Better late than never, this week's is <a href="http://nineworldstenthousandthings.blogspot.com/2011/03/expansion-joints-part-4-rogue.html" rel="nofollow">here.</a>Jenniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06589550267781293462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-74915723396950048402011-03-20T21:53:05.284+00:002011-03-20T21:53:05.284+00:00Oops... Nice one Bix! I'd count G.I. myself as...Oops... Nice one Bix! I'd count G.I. myself as it was used as a 'term' in its own right. Those names took me back too!<br /><br />Peter's 'Wallet away!', while not common in modern usage, might be a suitable use in other times. He could of course gone for 'Wallet aweigh!' implying it was clear of the bottom, i.e. Free and clear. ;-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-88169867971271250132011-03-20T21:28:27.516+00:002011-03-20T21:28:27.516+00:00Thanks, I've just been and added the first two...Thanks, I've just been and added the first two words, Food and Fort too. It seemed a bit unfair to just dive in at Week 3. :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-65806684405784026412011-03-20T21:02:53.406+00:002011-03-20T21:02:53.406+00:00@Porky: Thank you for the compliment. :-D
@Jennie...@Porky: Thank you for the compliment. :-D<br /><br />@Jennie: thanks for the help :-Dpeterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09450643635236807442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-70027072202154252882011-03-20T20:56:45.739+00:002011-03-20T20:56:45.739+00:00The blue G.I. read the cover; Helm, Gunnar and Bag...The blue G.I. read the cover; Helm, Gunnar and Bagman laughed ‘Spelt Trooper wrong Rogue!’ <br /><br />The G.I. might be cheating but I gave it a go :DBixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09830846814651524209noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-31883855337569617592011-03-20T20:07:14.794+00:002011-03-20T20:07:14.794+00:00@ Jennie - I think you assume very right..! Imagin...@ Jennie - I think you assume very right..! Imagination failure on my part. That makes it a far better story even than it seemed, and demonstrates to me the danger of getting caught up in the technical.<br /><br />@ peter - Sorry about that - it's actually beyond excellent..!<br /><br />@ Jim Hale - It's coming along, and this 15 seems to give you a good bridge into the next development. Good idea with the page. I've never looked into to setting any up, but I can see the attraction in what you've done there. Very useful function.Porkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00604351052444947490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-71517342603392572232011-03-20T18:54:33.770+00:002011-03-20T18:54:33.770+00:00Rogue was standing open-mouthed and wide-eyed, hav...Rogue was standing open-mouthed and wide-eyed, having witnessed what Ellie had just done.<br /><br />The full body of my efforts so far can be found at <a href="http://jim-hale.blogspot.com/p/expanders.html" rel="nofollow">here</a>. Anyone is welcome to have a play around with it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-81928247016534239032011-03-20T17:32:32.176+00:002011-03-20T17:32:32.176+00:00@Porky, I assumed Peter was making a (very funny) ...@Porky, I assumed Peter was making a (very funny) pun on the word "rogue", with a "Rogue state" in this instance meaning not only one that merited the disapproval of neighboring governments, but one that was formed by or largely populated with that class.Jenniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06589550267781293462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-65217097967863494152011-03-20T16:42:25.579+00:002011-03-20T16:42:25.579+00:00@ The Angry Lurker - Another review under the belt...@ The Angry Lurker - Another review under the belt. That title always made the film stand out for me, and probably for many others. I wonder what sense of 'rogue' the first edition was using? It's a colourful word. Here the repetition hammers the point home.<br /><br />@ Dave G _ Nplusplus - I had the same trouble in mine. I considered using a contraction, but was lucky enough to find another way round. It does make the grand-sounding a little harder to write, but you've done well here to get the gravity. Fragments are just fine. Going back to that discussion from last week, trying to tell a whole story in 15 probably means the thing needs more thinking about by the reader. When I look back at mine later they can seem impenetrable. On another point, yours this week makes me realise again the stories based on dialogue don't always show clearly how many speakers there are, and that adds an extra dimension, more potential breadth.<br /><br />@ peter - Excellent English! The line "Wallet away!" is unconventional - it suggests the wallet jumping or being thrown, and we'd likely use something more like "Wallet gone!" - but it works very well here; it gives a fantastical twist, and more drama, plus the mystery of a possible magic, or even that the wallet has been tempted to leave by a real rogue! I don't think anyone could guess English wasn't your first language from that story. To be fair to rogue states though, the supposedly respectable ones also see their share of petty crime..!Porkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00604351052444947490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-46094008508596965342011-03-20T16:00:46.539+00:002011-03-20T16:00:46.539+00:00I want to give it a try and I hope it's good E...I want to give it a try and I hope it's good English ;-):<br /><br />My pocket was empty!<br />Wallet away!<br />I should have expected this in a “Rogue state”!<br /><br />Greetings Peterpeterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09450643635236807442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-2008256685932405892011-03-20T15:33:38.330+00:002011-03-20T15:33:38.330+00:00btw, any of my stories are also open for expansion...btw, any of my stories are also open for expansion.<br /><br />I'll attempt an epos this week, expanding on your "elf"<br /><br />"It's forbidden!"<br />"Correct, we'll be marked for death."<br />"We've no choice."<br />"Then we go rogue."<br /><br /><br />I note a few things here. Contractions are a great way to save words, but it's difficult to create natural language. Even that first line, I wanted to use "It is" to make it stronger.<br /><br />Still not sure what I think of an epos. Maybe I just like fragments.Dave Garbehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01557481319925772152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4487413006559113471.post-68991567318595819002011-03-20T15:29:35.168+00:002011-03-20T15:29:35.168+00:00Ewan McGregor the Rogue Trader brought a bank down...Ewan McGregor the Rogue Trader brought a bank down, maybe even an entire country down.The Angry Lurkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01227314379603418332noreply@blogger.com